jebbypal

I am an original Farscape fan as well as Firefly fan. Equally rabid about both. Crossovers make me shudder, but yours has kept me intrigued all the way through to the last words of ch 9. You closely apply the "logic" and "science" of the Uncharted territories as well as the 'Verse. The idea of John crossing over in a wormhole actually works for me and especially with all of the alternate realities that he was able to interact with. I find the idea of River being able to sense wormholes fascinating, although I wonder how she would be able to recognize them for the entities they are. I do hope that you will spend some time having River describe this ability and how it might manifest itself. If you want a scientific basis for the scifi go check out String Theory, it should give you lots and lots of fodder for exposition...hell it might as well be science fiction. Anyways, hard to think of MJ leaving, but your case is plausible and heart-wrenching. For the most part I am impressed with your characterization and I actually am enjoying the first person narrative, perhaps because Harvey and John's conversations are always a scream and seeing the crew through Harvey's eyes is absolutely priceless. The only thing disturbing is how you portray River's personality, especially in light of the future pairing of River/John. She seems childish and petty, something that I would never attribute to her even at her worst. I understand that Simon's kidnapping would render her almost catatonic but I am just having a difficult time recognizing her in this present guise. The only other nitpick is regarding your description of John's pulse pistol and rifle during the conversation between Jayne and John prior to the Reaver attack. The chakon oil would come in a cartridge but not a clip and you wouldn't describe the number of shots it had left by using "rounds", the term "shots" or "charges" would work since we technically do not know what type of energy the pulses actually were. If I recall, they even used that description in the series once or twice but it is incorrect. I am probably the only one in the Uncharted Territories or the 'Verse who would be anal-retentive enough to notice that little detail. Otherwise, truly a great story and one that I am eagerly awaiting another 130,000 words or so :D

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